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Help a classmate. Fix the following sentences:

1. Beat Officer Chris Engle, who was the one to write Felt’s citation, agrees that the issue of minors drinking will remain an issue in Pullman and that beat officers are important in helping control underage drinking.

Beat officer Chris Engle, who wrote Felt's citation, agrees underage drinking will remain an issue in Pullman and beat officers are important in helping control it.

2. According to the data, WSU reported no homicides, 2 aggravated assaults, and several other incidence.

WSU reported no homicides, two aggravated assaults and several other incidents, according to the data.

3. “If it was not for financial aid,” Smith said, “than I would have had a much harder time getting my Bachelor’s degree; not to mention my Master’s.”

"If it was not for financial aid," Smith said, "Then I would have had a harder time getting my bachelor's degree, not to mention my master's."

4. Though the university is losing money, they are also receiving applications from more potential students, Jones said.

Though the university is losing money, it is still receiving applications, Jones said.

5. The Whitman County housing market experienced a 31 percent decrease in home sales in the past year. (Shorten by five words)

In the past year, Whitman County housing market sales decreased 31 percent.

6. As a 22 year old student at Seattle University Stephanie Marie did not know the different risk associated with having unprotected sex. (Correct and shorten by three words.)

Seattle University student, Stephanie Marie, 22, did not know the risks associated with unprotected sex.

7. The Washington State Liquor Control Board has had enough of the caffeinated malt-liquor beverage, Four Loko. It is now in the process of banning it from shelves on Nov. 18. (Combine into one sentence and cut any unnecessary words.)

The Washington State Liquor Control Board is in the process of banning Four Loko from shelves Nov. 18, saying they have had enough of the beverage.

8. Despite criticism for its lack of change so far, legislators uphold their belief that the ban on cell phones while driving will eventually lower the accident rates

Despite criticism for its lack of change, the ban on cell phones while driving will eventually lower accident rates, legislators believe.

9. Police said they do not know (who/whom) attended the party last month.

Police said they do not know who attended the party last month.