Tuesday, September 14, 2010

Improved lede

Original lede: A Lack of volunteers and additional funding lead to Women’s Transit delayed starting date according to Women’s Resource Center representative at the ASWSU Senate meeting, Wednesday Sept. 1.

Improved lede: Many women began the year without a safe ride due to Women's Transit delaying operation until Sept. 13 because of a lack of funding and volunteers.

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